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12 March 2009 @ 08:22 pm
Whim [Urahara/Rukia]  
Title: Whim
Pairing: Urahara x Rukia
Fandom: Bleach
Genre: General
Rating: PG
Word Count: 157

for bleach_contest; prompt: 15 sentence fic


Oh god, I am going to die (if there were gods).

Ragged, jagged, pieces and parts ripping off in flying wisps, her soul slowly torn away. Everywhere they went, and Rukia fantically - eyes fixed and heart racing from despair - stole stranger strength and laid it to rest at heart. 

Is that blood? (ghosts don't bleed).

"Do you want to live?"

She turned her head - tried - and without glancing up, knew the voice instinctively: some demon crept close to kill her absolutely.

"I said," amused and wry, "Do you want to live? I can help you, you know. Give you a new body. A substitute body, while you...regenerate."

(He's never been one for euphemisms.)

Yes, she heard inside. 

He grinned widely, a little lesson on deception. Waved his hands (drama) and voiced some incantations (gratuity) and all of a sudden - 

She was fine again.

Make you holy and hell.

"Thanks," Rukia muttered and stood up. 

katesmannequin on March 13th, 2009 04:17 am (UTC)
This is awesome. You managed to pack pure, undiluted AWESOME into 157 words.
Have I mentioned that this is awesome? ♥
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on March 13th, 2009 04:32 am (UTC)
Yes, you did. Thank you so much. :)
orange_fuu on March 13th, 2009 05:07 pm (UTC)
Very nice! A lot happened within those 157 words! Good job :)
Vayshti: bleachvayshti on March 14th, 2009 12:53 am (UTC)
some demon crept close to kill her absolutely.

This is an utterly gorgeous line - pure poetry in a piece that manages to bleed menace.
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on March 15th, 2009 01:48 am (UTC)
Thank youuu!
misumarumisumaru on March 14th, 2009 11:22 am (UTC)
“Thanks,” Rukia muttered and stood to leave.

Grateful, isn't she? :P I'm really curious about when this is set - is this when she's given the gigai at the start of the series or another time?
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on March 15th, 2009 01:48 am (UTC)
Haha, seriously! Just like her to be so pithy and apathetic about being saved.

Beginning of series. :)
~o0o~fine_lights on March 14th, 2009 03:12 pm (UTC)
I loved Uruhara's gratuitous incantations (ever the showman!). The "holy and hell" line is haunting.
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on March 15th, 2009 01:48 am (UTC)
I love when Urahara makes everything so dramatic. ^^
amorous seizures: face of evilsickletongue on March 15th, 2009 08:05 am (UTC)
this reminds me a little of how a play would read. Mostly because of the abrupt stops and use of brackets.
And I love plays, so naturally I loved this.
Clever clever clever girl!
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on March 16th, 2009 04:13 am (UTC)
Thank you. :3

It's funny that you mention plays because we've been reading a bunch of them in literature recently. Must've rubbed off. Haha.
ceres_wishceres_wish on March 18th, 2009 03:03 pm (UTC)
Gosh, i like this. It's short but there's everything needed for that scene!

And what can be better than the starting line of "Oh, god, I am going to die (if there were gods)" ^^