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07 December 2008 @ 02:42 pm
Enlisting a Surrogate [Tom-Tom & Katara]  
Title: Enlisting a Surrogate
Pairing: Tom-Tom & Katara
Fandom: Avatar the Last Airbender
Genre: General
Rating: PG
Word Count: 300

A/N: For those of you who forgot, Tom-Tom is Mai's little brother.


Tom-Tom had a secret he wouldn’t tell, not even to his mother & father (not even Mai).

He met her at the end of the war, when he was three. And he would have said he fell instantly in love, hopeless like a fish out of water, but then that would be a lie. Tom-Tom never lied.

She was so kind to him, gave him candy (his parents never did, “bad for the teeth”) and petted him. She had large, blue eyes that sparkled and focused in on itself—like she knew something he didn’t. And he could never persuade her enough to tell.

Time enough to tell—

That was the last straw to suffer.

He buries his head with thoughts of her. And this was the year when his mother died (consumption, the doctors said and tsk, tsked, rolling their eyes).

So, the girl—now supposedly “older and wiser”—took him with her. He had just turned ten.

His father didn’t protest (knew Tom-Tom was better off close to his sister and this Surrogate).

The girl-woman promised she would be kind, like she was when she kidnapped him in his infant life, swore that she would bring him to his sister’s (grave) place. Tom-Tom smiled so wide that day he felt the muscles strain.

The heart pulling.

It was the perfect time, he was so close so right in the moment. Ready for the picking. The Fire Lord sat merely inches away, facing him, staring into him.

And knew that he knew. And knew that Katara (he finally got her name) was his barrier of defense.

Tom-Tom proposed a toast, to his sister, to his mother & father, and to the Surrogate and the Fire Lord.

The Fire Lord flinched in surprise (Tom-Tom was pleased, ready for the picking).

Fish Eye no Miko: zuko lightningfenm on December 8th, 2008 02:37 am (UTC)
The girl-woman

She's at least 20 by this time, dude. She's a woman.

swore that she would bring him to his sister’s (grave) place.

When did his sister die?

Also, she took him with her, and then "It was the perfect time", and... Seriously, the time line in this story completely baffles me.
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on December 8th, 2008 02:52 am (UTC)
1. metaphoric description
2. this is post-series theoretical
3. *insert whatever you imagine*
Fish Eye no Miko: zuko lightningfenm on December 9th, 2008 01:10 am (UTC)
1. Which doesn't fit her at all, imo. It barely fits her at 14, frankly, but 7-10 years after that?

2. Obviously. That doesn't answer my question. It's just odd that you mention his mom dying, but then reference Mai's grave. It kind of feels like you left something out.

3. I'm not even sure what you mean by that...
Y U no auto-translate?lye_tea on December 9th, 2008 03:48 am (UTC)
1. It's how I picture her -- as having a quality of being both old and young.
2. Of course, I intentionally left the majority of the meaning out in this fic.
3. And because I'm an incorrigibly sadistic bitch I won't explain that either. :D
ohsoxalive: i shine so bright // ty leeohsoxalive on December 8th, 2008 07:32 pm (UTC)
Interesting idea. And as always, I love your metaphoric writing.